The Kindle light I use, and love, is an XXXXXX.
I say, use that with the Kindle. Then I'll contact XXXXXX and see if they'll send us some swag in exchange for the plug.
Joe
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Jeff, I figure you're just getting started on the manuscript I'm going to finish this scene today, and then let you know where you can to stick it (ok that didn't sound nice, but you know what I mean ;). I would like you to see how it integrates with the end scenes on your read...might need to have Shanna hearing the big .50 chugging.
Blake
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34 pages in, just minor tweaks here and there. I cut the "Talk about a half-assed injury" joke because Lanz is a jerk who would not be thinking in amusing puns.
There's one piece with Lanz fleeing that might confuse readers:
"Out of the treatment room, into the ER proper. Ignore the terrified, questioning faces. Find a place to hide. A door--SUPPLIES. The handle won't turn. Locked. Of course. But he has a key. He fumbles it free, unlocks the steel door, ducks inside, closes and locks it behind him."
I think that putting this whole paragraph in italics will make it clear that the use of present tense is a stylistic choice. Any objections?
Jeff
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None. I lapsed into present and left it.
Paul
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No objections to italics. But the "half-assed injury" joke will make it into the final manuscript, if not by Lanz then by an observer that I invent specifically to say the joke.
In fact, I'm pretty close to renaming the book "Half-Assed Injury." Rather than the title looking like fangs, it will have different identifiable features.
Also, Jeff is off my Christmas list. This year I'm giving out hams to all of my friends. The hams will be delivered in brand new Camaros. Blake, you still wanted red, right?
Joe
* * *
I was thinking of you. I wouldn't want you to squander the "half-assed injury" joke on DRACULAS, where you might not get full credit for it.
Jeff
* * *
Don't lie. You weren't thinking of me at all. You were selfishly thinking about what's best for the book.
No Camaro for you. It would have been black, with a supercharger.
Instead, for Xmas I am sending you half a box of expired Minute Rice, and a rawhide bone my dog stopped chewing because it made her gums bleed. And you won't get them until December 28th.
Joe
* * *
"Talk about a half-assed injury!" said an onlooker, pointing at the softball player.
"Mr. McGlade, please," said the doctor, "if you don't hold your hand in place it's never going to reattach itself."
Then six or seven draculas burst into the room, and ate Harry in twelve or fourteen bites.
"I'm almost sad about that," said a patient. Then everybody popped open a cool refreshing beer and laughed for a while, just like the end of a Saturday morning cartoon.
Jeff
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Doesn't McGlade get killed in the Choose your own adventure Draculas subplot?
Blake
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Only twice, which isn't enough.
Jeff
* * *
You just lost your half box of Xmas Minute Rice, Mr. Sarcasm.
I'm leaning toward this:
Jack lowered the brim of his Boston Red Sox cap and sat down in the ER waiting room. He blended into the background, just another normal guy, an average face in the crowd. But the vibe was all wrong. This didn't seem like a run-of-the-mill fix-it job. He felt a chill--the Otherness that had become inseparable from his life since his near death encounter with the blue meanies.
(I'm still not sure where the "half-assed" joke will come in yet. I may have to write for this character for a few more chapters before I find the spot.)
BTW, Paul. Since you never mentioned Jack's last name, I'm just going to give him the surname "Snortkowski." Also, in this scene, he gets his pelvis chewed off. You're gonna have to retrofit that into your series.
Joe
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Don't lie, Mr. Liar McLyingpants.
The Draculas scene from Banana Hammock by J.A. Konrath went like this:
Mortimer rolled on top of her, like a lover, blood and saliva dripping onto Jenny's face and neck. She reached up to push him away, but even as terror-stricken as she was, Jenny couldn't bring herself to touch him. It was like willingly sticking your hand into a box of angry rattlesnakes. Even as his jaws drew near, Jenny's revulsion wouldn't allow her to fight back. She stretched out her hand--her face imploring--to Dr. Lanz, who stood within reach. But he shrank away from her beckoning fingers, retreating into the safety of the nurse's station.
This is it, Jenny thought. I'm going to die.
"Cool," Crazy Knife Goon said.
Harry McGlade nodded. "Draculas is a real roller coaster ride. Soon the whole hospital is overrun, with a few remaining survivors fighting for their lives."
"Which parts did Jeff Strand write?" Andrew Mayhem asked.
McGlade gave CKG a knowing nod, and then they both shoved Mayhem at the creature, who tore into Mayhem's throat like a fatty ripping open a bag of potato chips, except blood came out, not chips, and it wasn't a fatty, it was a dracula. There was babyish squealing and some unmanly cries for help from Mayhem, who was probably a bed wetter, and then the dracula ate him all up and everyone gave each other high-fives.
Also, despite the very reasonable $2.99 Kindle price, Draculas never sold a single copy, so Strand never got any royalties.
Joe
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I was too distracted by the desecration of Winnie the Pooh.
Jeff
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That wasn't desecration. That was parody, which is protected by fair use, and I never mentioned that beloved childhood copyrighted character by name so it isn't infringement.
Joe
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If McGlade shows up in this I fucking quit.
Blake
* * *
But I still get paid of course, it's a symbolic quitting.
Blake
* * *
You just lost yourself a Camaro, Mr. McCritical.
I think you're still sore because anytime someone mentions "Blake Crouch" in Banana Hammock, no one knows who you are.
Joe
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I come home Sunday night to 15 freakin emails? And I thought it was us old guys who weren't supposed to have lives.
Paul
* * *
Jeff started it.
Joe
September 27, 2010
Blake, I continue to be blown away by the amount of energy you're putting into the extra bonus features, and the marketing and publicity of Draculas.
I made a few tweaks to the working in the review email blast you just put in the dropbox...
CURRENT ARC REQUESTS: 165
Goal: 300
1. EMAIL TO PROOFREADER
Hi Marcus: Please find attached the manuscript in a word document. In terms of how to go about this, we would request that you make a running list of typos you locate and turn that list in with the corrected manuscript If they're straight-forward misspellings, blaring typos, just correct them--American spelling please :). If you come across something more complex, please just make a note of it. It's a big old book, and we would appreciate if you would go through the bonus content as well. Any questions, don't hesitate to ask, and thank you again for your willingness to help us out on this project (we've already thanked you in the acknowledgments).
Best!
Blake
2. EMAIL ADDRESSES AND EMAIL FOR SENDING MS. TO UPCOMING RESPONDERS TO JOE'S BLOG ANNOUNCEMENT FOR ARCS AND TO GOOD READS
Thanks to:
Marcus Blakeston, Carl Graves, Rob Siders, Chris Rapking, Suzanne Tyrpak, Maria Konrath, Jeroen ten Berge,